Review this sample email I wrote l below: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VtN2F36qZrLExWHTM_gQIjhpWn0HqSdqHt0nHT4FKuo/edit?usp=sharing Share your thoughts (even the not-so nice ones)

Hi Adspend Team, New here and super excited to connect with you all. I'm a copywriter and marketer based in NYC. I recently made a sample sales page for my portfolio of a fake Tony Robbins Seminar "Life Coach Mastery". Id appreciate any feedback or critiques on the copy and sales page layout. Also looking for a copywriting, YT Ad, VSL partner/ mentor to level up. Check out the sales page below: https://telesfordrobbinssalespagesample.carrd.co/