Drop your copy or your sales page and get a professional feedback Note : many individuals drop very random copy and very weak pls drop the most copy you put effort on it and open access to give feedback on it that's it for the day
The Sl is confusing Don't know if it's a statement or a question The story itself doesn't hook As a fellow copywriter I do understand you but I doubt readers will understand what you are trying to say The lesson from the story is good but the story itself doesn't give the readers a reason to click Nice email and keep grinding